Friday, 29 May 2015


On a cloudy starless night  a boy named Jimmy was roasting marshmallows on a sizzling fire. Jimmy heard a gentle lapping from the lake coming to the shore. The trees encircled Jimmy's camping spot.

 A monster came out of the river he did a loud roar. He looked like a crocodile  and he had big green eyes and sharp teeth.When Jimmy saw the monster he got in action he was frighten.

Trying to defend himself Jimmy used his marshmallows on a stick  like a sword. Suddenly  Jimmy now knew that the monster liked Marshmallows because he snatched it out of Jimmy's hand it . After the monster grabbed the  Marshmallows he acted like a performing puppy that could do tricks like roll over and jump up .
Jimmy went fishing in his bag for a marshmallows. He gasped, “Oh no I only have one more marshmallow left.” He thought that the monster was going to eat him. Cautiously he held out the very last marshmallow in his hand. As soon as the monster saw it he quickly raced to gobble it up with his dirty pink tongue.

Waiting expectantly the monster sat up quickly for his next one. Finally, the monster reverted into a cold blooded monster with hard sharp teeth.The monster came closer to Jimmy with a large look in his eye he was mad. As the monster tried to attack Jimmy stumbled down in a big crash.

When the monster saw the pillow he went in marshmallow heaven  he thought it was the biggest marshmallow ever.The monster was so distracted  the boy escaped as fast as he can.The monster roasted the pillow over the campfire and it incinerated to a million pieces.

1 comment:

  1. Hi Ana I liked your story because.You used clever words.I learnt how to use detail in my story.I look forward for your next story.From:Amelia :)